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Your face is smooth
        like the edge of a freshly wiped blade

Your skin is warm
        like teardrops in a steel morgue

Your hands are soft
        like linen sheets over pale, cool remains

Your hair falls to your shoulders
        with the accuracy of a weighty noose

Your stride is as confident
        as a blood-spattered Gladiator

Your legs send my heart
        into a state of hysteria with an assassin's efficiency

Never have I wanted so badly
        something so fearsome
        so bone-chilling


                Now tell me, my darling,
                that you feel the same.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student Writer
Well, that was intriguing.
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Starkpretty Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
The best proposal ever.

This is really clever. I love the theme of love as deep as death, and I think your imagery is gorgeous.

<3
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Writer
Gah! THANK you!! =)
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:iconstarkpretty:
Starkpretty Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
:D you're very welcome, it was lovely!!
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SoraIsMyHomeboy Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
the recurring theme of death is beautiful and like the poem says, chilling
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's sweet. =) In a creepy kinda way.
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Writer
In a totally creepy way, agreed ;)
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Artist
nice :)
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!
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:iconangeluchiha7:
angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Artist
yw :)
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:icondreamingdeepestblakk:
Yes.
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:iconsimplycrisis:
SimplyCrisis Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
Morbid and amazing!
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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:iconchalekam:
chalekam Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very vampire-esque. Your poem's descriptive similes are exceptional 'teardrops on cold steet' was my favorite.
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much :)
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8Bpencil Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student General Artist
greattt poem! =)
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thankeeeee :glomp:
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:iconnekoninja13:
NekoNinja13 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
i love this so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Yay!!! I'm so glad!! :D
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:iconwolf-of-rome:
wolf-of-rome Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Reminds me of this girl I like. She'd like this.
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Show her! :D
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:iconwolf-of-rome:
wolf-of-rome Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I could never do that. She's my closest friend. Been there for me since High School. I'd rather she stood beside me as my friend than risk it.
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Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Writer
That's a difficult situation to be in. Really, I totally understand your feelings. Good luck, friend.
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ninjaLawliet Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
this is written nicely . u . it's also written from a very different point of view, which i enjoy ^^
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks very much!! :) Means a lot.
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:iconwerewolf-hero:
Werewolf-Hero Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A zombie?
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
If you wanna see it that way!
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:iconkittysib:
KittySib Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Neep! Intense!:D
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Yep :)
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KittySib Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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DinoBeawr Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Deep.
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful! ^_^
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Daww thanks!! :D
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
When credit is earned, you should be told in earnest what you did. And you made a wonderful poem. ^_^:D
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Haunting-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Man, my first impression was that the person was dead...... tell i'm wrong! Good story, by the way!
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Hey thanks! :D
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Haunting-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
np!
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Darkerhaze Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student General Artist
This is really good!
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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Darkerhaze Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student General Artist
welcome!(:
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alkanphel Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Very beautiful. Whoever gets to marry you will be the luckiest person in the world.
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, thank you :)
See, I was kind of afraid that this was horrible. Thanks for not hating it!
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:iconalkanphel:
alkanphel Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Honestly It would be hard to hate this. Your a great writer.

and an equally amazing girl.
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
:) That's very sweet.
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:iconalkanphel:
alkanphel Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Well its easy to be sweet to such a charming girl.
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow that was amazing!
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:iconmarian-ette:
Marian-ette Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks very much!
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NicolaiGrey Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
mamazing piece i loved it ^_^
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